Sorry, needs a lot of work.
I can't give you a high score, even though you apparently worked on it a lot.
Either you shouldn't be making FBF animation since you're not an art inclined person, or (the more likely) you need a lot more practice.
Just draw things in flash. Anything. Draw lots and lots of things and get used to how they look and how they deform in different angles. That will help you tons in having smooth, convincing animation. For now, things looked a little sloppy.
Learn some technique (and think of better fbf scenes), and your animations will get rated much higher.